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My Love Goes Free - in Progress, Critique Desired by dani-kelley My Love Goes Free - in Progress, Critique Desired by dani-kelley
Started as a sketch, taken into Illustrator to clean up. I feel like the line width is a little unruly on the "goes free" half. Any critique anyone has about letter forms, line width, composition, etc. are more than welcome.
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Tikatu Featured By Owner Feb 19, 2013  Hobbyist Writer
Since you seem to be suggesting an eternity symbol here, the words "my" and "goes" need a bit of tweaking to make them add to the curviness of the baseline (particularly "goes"). I know someone mentioned the "goes" issue elsewhere but I don't think they mentioned the flat baseline of the "my". Also, should "e" in the "ve" and the "oe" perhaps look closer stylistically? The "oe" has a more free and whimsical feeling; you might need to alter the "v" in order for that "e" to have the same effect (if that makes any sense).

I really like the composition over all. The font itself does the job of suggesting ease and freedom. A bit more curve to those flat spots will help nail the intent.
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